New crappy song for hzac to make fun of

[flipsk8r1409]

well because hzac just loved my last song so much lol NOT i figured id try again this time using some scales that i learned i have not recorded this yet hzac and its still a wip the leads did not blend as well as they do when im playing for some reason anyway here it is in guitar pro format hzac feel free to shred me apart oh btw its not done yet i still have to write an outro for it and it seems really short its only about 50 or 60 bars but thats cause i used a low bpm for certain parts so i could fit them into a single bar instead of using 2 or 3 bars

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[1crazyboy7]

First of all, you should write out drums/bass/whatever else in gp also. Makeing the intro 3 bars instead or 2/4/8/etc dosn't really sound right. The harmonization of the intro/verse also sounds weird/not ment to be together. The solo just sounded like putting random notes from a scale into guitar pro. The pre-chorus is very generic but the harmonization sounds find here. Again, makeing the chorus 5 bars just sounds weird. Its also pretty generic. The solos really need rhythm guitar and the second kinda sounds like random notes in a scale also. Then the next part sounds ok, but dosnt fit with the song. The bpm change was really odd and sounded bad. It sounds like random notes again with some random off key notes. wtf is up with the bpm change in the solo? The ending was also very generic and didnt fit the song at all.

Overall, it dosnt really seem like a "song" since the parts don't really go together well, only has 2 guitars and the rhythm dosn't play the whole time. The solos sound very random and so does the intro and verse. The chorus played 5 bars and only played once, I think you should at least play the chorus twice?

Don't take all that the wrong way. Just take it as constructive critism to make more songs.